So I've been writing this Soul Eater fanfic "The DSM?" for a while now and am looking for some more feedback...

Here's a basic summary/preview thing, let me know it you're interesting and if anyone wants, I'll post the chapter files here as well.


Thirteen years ago Lord Death made a desicion that would impact not only his own life, but his son's as well.

He held out his hand to the children, bending down in an attempt to show he meant them no harm.

"It's okay, I won't hurt you."

The young girl was the first to shakily stand and cautiously lay her hand on Lord Death's, appearing miniscule in...

Rawr....

*Kurumi stairs at Kid,then patty walk up to her.*

Patty:HI KURUMI!!

*Kurumi jumps back and screams*

Patty:opps did i scare you.

Kurumi:yeah maybe just alittle.So did you need something?

Patty:No.

Kurumi:...

*Patty starts to walk away*

Kurumi:Wait Patty can you do something for me????

Patty:sure what is it????

Kurumi:Well... I kinda have a crush on Kid and im too scared to tell him.Do you th....

Patty:YEAH ILL TELL HIM YOU HAVE A CRUSH ON HIM AND THAT YOU WANNA KISS HIM AND STUFF!!!!

Kurumi:WAIT PATTY YOU DIDN'T LET ME FINISH!!

Patty:Hey Kid Kurumi wanted to say somwthing to you.

Kurumi:NO...

*Kurumi staring at Kid*
*Patty sneaks up behind Kurumi*
Patty:HI KURUMI!!!!
Kurumi:AHHHHH.*FALLS BACKWORDS THEN GETS UP*
Patty:Opps did I scare ya.
Kurumi:Yeah,maybe just alittle*while rubbing head*
Anyway did you need something.
Patty:uhhhh....nope I can't thing of anything.
Both: . . .
Patty:OKAY I BEST BE GOING.
Kurumi:Wait Patty can you do something for m...
Patty:YEAH SURE WHAT IS IT!!!!
Kurumi:Well,theres a boy I like and I'm to scared to tell him.
Patty:Well....Who is it?
Kurumi:Well it's uhh someone you know.and uhh...it's of corse a boy.Uhh and his name rhymes with mid.
Patty:..............huh
Kurumi:It's...

Death the Kid (デス・ザ・キッド, Desu za Kiddo) commonly called "Kid" (キッド, Kiddo) by his friends and family, is one of the main meisters that the series follows. He is Patti and Liz's meister and Shinigami-sama's son.

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Personality

Kid suffers from obsessive-compulsive disorder, or OCD, which is manifested as an obsession over symmetry, otherwise known as asymmetriphobia. Things (and people) must be perfectly symmetrical, lest something unknown and awful happen. Thus if anything is off by any measurement (a picture frame off by millimeter, or a pose that is slightly out of place),...

COMMMENT!!!

Kid walked Lacey, Icesiss, Allison, and Jaylen, around the DWMA. They met Maka, Soul, unfortunately Black Star, Tsubaki, and Crona. As they neared the class rooms Kid saw Stein rolling in his chair. "Well seems like we have new students, your names." he asked. "I'm Lacey, this is Allison, Jaylen, and Icesiss." Lacey introduced. "Well, I'm sure you'll easily get use to the school, be safe, sometimes Black Star might challenge you." He said rolling away. "Wow, he was actually polite and not crazy this time." Liz stated. Kid chuckled and kept walking them around till they were in front...